Can You Tell A Story In…

Here’s this week’s story challenge for you:

Can you tell a story in 30 words? You must use the following words somewhere in the story:

  • DENTIST
  • ELEGANT
  • TROUT
  • POCKET

Last week’s prompt was to tell a story in 41 words using the following words in it somewhere:

  • TRICK
  • CALORIE
  • SNAIL
  • MARATHON
  • ROAR

Here are your clever stories:

Richmond Road:

Here’s the trick. Calories in, calories out.

Calorie deficit.

It’s not a sprint. Not a marathon. Not even a race. Snail’s pace will do.

There is no finishing line and no roar from the crowd. The roar must come from within.

SW:

Monty emitted a thunderous roar. The shell shattered underfoot. Warm slime oozed around his hairy toes. Damn snails. There must be easier ways of burning calories than a barefoot marathon. He needed to find a trick for dealing with race-day gastropods.

Nicola Daly:

‘He tricked me!’ roared the woodlouse. ‘That sneaky calorie-counting snail tricked me.’

‘How?’

‘He told me I need a marathon under my belt. I’ve run flipping miles. And look!’

The cheeky snail rustled a Marathon and stuck it under his belt.

Sexagenarian Scribbler:

It’s a marathon, not a sprint. said the snail to himself, that’s the trick. Slow and steady win the race. (now where had he heard that before?)

Emerging the victor, he let out a snail sized roar.

Calories burnt a bonus…

Tessa:

Here are some tricks to help you eat fewer calories:

Use smaller plates to eat protein rich foods such as snails, first, while watching marathons of race cars roar around a track. Drink water before meals. Eat breakfast and eat mindfully.

Poetessadeilibri (in only 15 words):

I was roaring for a trick

sweets were everywhere like snails

a marathon of calories

John W. Howell:

The trick to winning the marathon is to watch every single calorie before the race and in your mind’s eye imagine the roar of the crowd as you pass the last place snail near the finish line.

The Bag Lady:

The scale’s no friend to Marjorie. Her marathon low calorie diet went nowhere. Not mastering the trick of jogging on a treadmill, only walked at a snail’s pace. Two months later she got on the scale and roared, “I’ve lost weight!”

Murray Clarke:

The snail-like mouse was determined to take part in the marathon. The trick was to consume one calorie of cheese every minute for over an hour. He subsequently ran in the race and won, turning his tiny squeak into a roar!

Pensivity101:

It was a marathon like no other, the roar of the crowd urging him on to success.

It was no trick and they stood in disbelief. The snail had beaten the slug over the finishing line! They demanded a calorie recount!

Christine Mallaband-Brown:

At the creatures athletic competition each animal talked about their races.

“The trick,” said the snail, “when sliding a marathon race, is to use as few calories as possible. The best bit is hearing the crowd roar as I won gold!”

Squirreljan:

The trick was counting every calorie and walking every day. My weight dropped and my snail pace quickened until I was roaring and running like a lioness in pursuit of the next meal. The metaphorical marathon had ended in success. ROAR!

Ann Edall-Robson:

The roar from the crowd signalled the end of the eating marathon. No one could believe the snail was the top calorie intake winner. He was quoted as saying, “The trick is to eat all of the time, and I do.

Gene:

“Ready for lunch?” Lizzy asked, adding, “I’ve taken into account your pledge about your daily calorie consumption sweetie.”

“Thanks!” her husband responded with an enthusiastic roar, adding, “that’s the key trick to running a marathon at more than a snail pace.”

Alz Gusta:

The snail roared triumphantly as she crossed the finish line, taking second in the Boston Marathon. Steve bent down, plucked her up, and swallowed her whole. The trick to cheat days, Steve said, “is getting the most out of your calories.”

Chris Farley:

“Don’t you see,” she said, “slimming isn’t burning a calorie here or there. It’s your diet. Look at the French, with their marathon snail-eating dinners with litres of Bordeaux.”

“Yes,” he replied, “I’d roar too with all that on my stomach.”

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42 responses to “Can You Tell A Story In…”

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  2. I entered the elegant building searching for the dentist’s office, only to find he had gone trout fishing. I kept the broken tooth in my pocket hoping to return tomorrow.

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    1. That’s a great story, Darlene.

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  3. Lady Barrington lifted her bejewelled pocket mirror and gasped, horrified. Voluminous trout pout lips distorted her hitherto elegant features. She’d never entrust her cosmetic surgery to a backstreet dentist again.

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    1. That’s excellent! Thank you 😊

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      1. Thanks Esther😊

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  4. John was dapper, down to the kerchief in his suit pocket;  Margret elegant.  They ordered the trout with a fine Chardonnay.  Nobody would guess he was a dentist from Fargo.

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    1. I like that very much. A great story!

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      1. Thanks, glad you liked it!

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  5. Thank you, Esther for the link. Here’s mine – My dentist seems elegant for sure. Well, except for that day old trout in his pocket. Oh yes, and the drill. Let’s not forget the drill.

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    1. I had the dreaded drill yesterday – root canal treatment. Not nice! Thank you for your story. You’ve woven the words in so well.

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      1. Oh, no. I really don’t like the dentist. Thanks for your kind words, Esther.

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    nikidaly70

    I looked so elegant when I went for my dentist appointment – even had a clean hankie in my pocket. He only went and called me an old trout – the rotter!

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    1. That made me laugh so much!

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  7. These are better then anything I could come up with

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    1. I’m sure not, but they do it very well 😊

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  8. The elegant dentist sign showed a picture of a trout flopping out of a set of dentures. The pocket on his shirt said “You’ll never even know you missed it.”

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    1. That’s funny. Great stuff, Tessa.

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  9. Dentists are going on strike, because they can’t keep their elegant surgeries clean. Trout have invaded their pockets. It’s an unusual situation, made worse by global warming causing trout rot.

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  10. Trout fishing has an aura of elegance about it. A subtle style of violence and brutality practiced by gentlemen. Doctors, dentists, lawyers. Men of influence and deep pockets. Chronic masturbators.

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    squirreljan

    My weird but elegant dentist pulled a tepee from his suit pocket. “It’s like fishing for trout. Cast the rod, wiggle it about, remove the fish and farewell tooth decay.”

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    1. I’ll have to try that! 😂

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  12. The elegant Dr. Trout welcomed the Dentist Society. Her exuberant speech sent laughter through the room. Especially when her red lipstick mouth resembled a torn pocket flapping in the breeze.

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    1. Wow! Very powerful stuff, Ann.

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      1. This one was a bit of a challenge.

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  13. Dinner with Andy ,the dentist was disastrous .The plated trout stared up at me .I tried to appear elegant. When Andy wasn’t looking, I slipped the trout into my pocket.

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  14. The elegant dentist, tweed and barefoot, shoes in hand, yelled as he slipped from the stepping stone with a splash. He screamed instead when a trout squirmed in his pocket.

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    1. That’s funny. Thanks, Chris.

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  15. I was reading the Daily Mirror when, like a mirror, a piece of my wisdom tooth broke off. It wasn’t very elegant, especially as it nearly landed in my trout almondine. I slipped it into my pocket, but by the time I reached the dentist, I found only a £50 note; the tiny fragment of tooth had completely disappeared. Perhaps the tooth fairy had slipped out from the tale I was reading.

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    1. That’s very entertaining 😊

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  16. […] asks: “Can You Tell A Story In….?” This week’s challengeis to include the words “dentist”, “elegant”, […]

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    1. I loved your story! Thank you so much for taking part 😊

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      1. A pleasure, Esther! I’ll be back!

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      2. Yay! Glad to hear it 😊

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