Can You Tell A Story In…

I hope your week is going well so far. Here’s your new story challenge:

Can you tell a story in 20 words? You must use the following words somewhere in the story:

  • TICKET
  • WIND
  • BEAR

Last week’s prompt was a photo:

Here are your stories:

Christine Mallaband-Brown:

Railings and luggage on trolleys. Stacked luggage by a large white painted doorway.

Louise looked at the photo without understanding. What was this place? She had never seen anything like it before. She was a millennial and hadn’t left her town much, especially since the covid pandemic.

“What is it?” she asked Kurt.

“Oh, it’s an old station, you know, for steam trains. Don’t tell me you never saw a steam engine?”

“No, should I have done?”

“Well, it looks like there are gaps in the floor where the trains run on rails. But the fence rails would be in the way if you want to get in the train,” she said.

He scratched his head. What was this photo of…?

Both of them stared at the photo. It was old fashioned and printed on paper. They had no internet connection and so could not take a picture of it and do an image search.

Knowledge only includes what you know. If you haven’t learnt about something, how can you know what it is?

“I think we will have to find more information when we get home. Maybe we can visit it, if it’s close by?”

Sarian Lady:

The Suitcase:

Another pile of suitcases faced Joe at the dockside. He had rented a little terrace after the war and lived there with his sister and baby.

Her life was ruined. She was not married. An outcast. Joe would never let Annie give the baby away. He was a lovely little boy named Bertie.

He turned to the job at hand.

Suddenly his eye caught an initial on one suitcase: A.K. Albert Kennerly. He thought he was dead. They were good friends and Joe had watched his friend fall as they went over the top that terrifying morning.
Joe, Albert and Annie had spent a leave together one hot summer during the war. Picnics on the beach, then back to the trenches. He shuddered.

Joe came home to find his sister pregnant. She told him the father was a boy from the village and she didn’t want anything to do with him.

Standing, looking at this suitcase, it dawned on Joe. It all fitted. Here was Albert, on his way to a new life. What a swine.

Maybe he wasn’t aware of the child. If he had, Joe could be on his way to the New World and Albert would be loading suitcases. Joe must find out before the ship sailed.

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25 responses to “Can You Tell A Story In…”

  1. The bear lumbered along through the forest looking for a snack before it was time to hibernate. The wind whistled through the trees and soon he smelled what might be his meal ticket. Sure enough, as he came into the clearing, he saw a pup tent. The bear sniffed and approached the pup tent slowly, listening for human noises. Pushing his head through the opening, he spied an empty sleeping bag and a cooler. Growling in anticipation, he opened the cooler, found a drink and tore the top off with his sharp teeth. Drinking it down, he roared with dissatisfaction. Bear needed food! Lumbering his way back out of the tent, he saw the pan sitting on the campfire. Score! He stuck his pointed snout into the pan which held some yummy smelling meat, and roared again as the heat burned his muzzle. Running away and growling in disgust, the bear was back on the hunt for an elusive snack.

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    1. Hi Kim, the story was 20-words, but I’m still going to print it because I love it!

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  2. marcus power Avatar
    marcus power

    Hi Ester,

    I hope this finds you well.

    Here is my attempt at the twenty word story.

    The blistering wind was relentless as I joined the ticket queue. All one could do was grin and bear it.

    Best Wishes,

    Marcus

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    1. That’s great! Very good response!

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  3. The lottery ticket was in the bears mouth, then the wind caught it. Honestly, that’s how I lost my fortune!

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    1. That made me chuckle! Damn wind!

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      1. I just happened to be on here and yours popped in!

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  4. Putting those words together seems a little surrealistic, so:
    The girl with kaleidoscope eyes calls, I answer. A bear waves from the turnstile. The wind whips my ticket away.
    More of a “real” story?
    Ticket in hand, a bear lunged. I dropped everything and ran like the wind. Train missed, that’s why I’m late.

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    1. I like both of these. Not easy to come up with something realistic, but I could believe the second!

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      1. Thanks. I guess “bear” does not have to be an animal, but.. Anyway, the second is a fanciful excuse….

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  5. Sara clutched the ticket tightly. She wanted to fly like the wind to places unknown and maybe see a bear.

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    1. That’s very good, Darlene.

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  6. Rupert Bear held the winning ticket, but the wind blew strong and managed to nick it.

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      1. Re-written, much more in the original style of the Rupert books.

        Rupert Bear held the winning ticket.
        Alas, the wind blew strong and managed to nick it.

        I remember that there were a lot of alases in the narrative of Rupert’s stories.

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      2. Great. Thanks, Lance.

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  7. Hi Esther,
    Mugged
    Ticket gone
    .Pedalling like the wind, knocked me down.
    Can’t bear to live in this place.
    Must get home.

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    1. That’s super! I like the strcuture.

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      1. Sheila Hall Avatar
        Sheila Hall

        Thankyou

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  8. The giant black bear caught the ticket with his teeth, when the furious wind tore it out of my hand.

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